Strangers


Calling

The way the phone fell from her hand reminded him of an atom bomb, its slow descent ended by the shattering of glass and little pieces of technology shrapneling around her ankles.  If he thought calling her name would keep her from running towards the man in white, he would have used it.  Instead he stood, a sentinel, the affair she'd never admit, as the woman for whom his heart beat tasted the kisses of someone else.  A stranger now, he waited for her to look back at him- just once.   She never turned, her downy curls the final salute.

Typewriter and Logo for 100 Words
First time for this challenge.  What can I say?  I love prompts.  They make me write, which makes me write better.

7 comments:

  1. Really good. Look forward to reading more!

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  2. Such a heartbreaking story!

    Welcome to the 100 Word Challenge. How'd you find us?

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    1. I followed Thin Spiral Notebook over from Trifecta. Really looking forward to reading and connecting with other writers!

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  3. Welcome to the challenge! It's a fun one, really makes you stretch each and every word for meaning.

    It's a little difficult to figure out what's happened...was she caught in the affair and returning to her first 'love'? Was this love supposedly gone but suddenly returned?

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    1. What I was going for a story from the perspective of the man she had an affair with while her husband was away (whites, like dress whites for military) and this was a glimpse of his homecoming. Her affair was being a bit of a stalker. Apparently I needed more than 100 words to get that across ;)

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  4. Visiting from VV which I recently discovered as well! Enjoyed your writing - makes me want to know more of the story. Also, liked all the references such as "man in white", "final salute", "a sentinel".

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