Mercy #fiveminutefriday

Five Minute Friday

She always killed in the rain.

Mercy liked the way the rain came down on the tin roof and washed away her fingerprints with redemptive drops.  It was anonymity, raincoats pulled up past her neck and black and gray shapes against the horizon.  He was not in black or grey, he was in orange loud and abrasive like sandpaper against her eyes.  She followed one hundred steps behind him, counting each one as she followed him around corners and alley ways, like she had been doing for months.

He was a nurse.  He was a nurse who knew how to smother a patient without leaving a sign and to forge signatures well enough to pad his bank account with pension checks and inheritance.  He helped the sick and dying into an early grave while helping himself to the last pieces of them.  Andrew made his way into the pawnshop, predicable as ever.  

She watched from the window as he heaped pockets full of pearls and rings and watches on the glass counter, all older than him and worth more in sentimentality than in cash.  Her fingers twitched in her pockets and she kept walking.  

Tonight was not the night.  But soon enough, Mercy would enact justice, swift as a lightning bolt above.  


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A little bit of fiction tonight!  The first bit of Mercy can be found here.  Very dark, but that's my kind of fun.

59 comments:

  1. Oh wow! Not what I was expecting at all. Well done!

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  2. Whoa girl. This is a totally different swing for FMF! It's such a nice surprise to see some fiction up in here. And also, this is creepy and terrifying and weird in the best ways.

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  3. Oooohhh...love it. Great take on the prompt tonight! :) Happy Friday!

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  4. Intriguing! Love your angle on this!

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  5. And this would be why you've inspired me to write fiction. Love you, Meg!!! So excited that my main character shares your name -- and I didn't even plan it ;)

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  6. Ha! Thank you. I definitely feel out of place after reading everyone else's posts ;)

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  7. Thank you! It's fun to mix it up sometimes. Vanessa does fiction too!

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  8. Thank you Mel! Happy Friday :)

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  9. What's funny is you inspire me! I am so honored to share in your writing. I love you and I'm so glad that FMF brought us together!

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  10. Wowsa! Good stuff. What a fun surprise to see a snippet of fiction. You go, girl!

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  11. Spontaneous fiction? Impressive! Love that- I need to try it...but still I also love that Dr. Who Mug. Not that I am easily distracted or anything. ;)

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  12. Oh, you should have seen my smile when I saw you posted part of your stories!!! LOVE IT!

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  13. Hehehe. I love my doctor who mug! You should do spontaneous fiction! I'm going to be starting a link up for it :)

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  14. Thank you! I heart fiction.

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  15. Aww I love you Ms. Marcy! You make me smile :)

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  16. Wow, I was pleasantly surprised. Glad I stopped by. I wanted to curl up with a cup of coffee and finish the book.


    Sophia

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  17. Okay- now we need the whole book :)
    Fun!

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  18. Bravo! So very creative!

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  19. Beautiful - and also my kind of fun! :)

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  20. So dark, as always. I liked how you were able to set up you characters in a very small space.

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  21. coming over from the link up - I love a good fiction piece! Nicely done!

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  22. love this post! thanks so much for sharing!

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  23. Megan - EXCELLENT!!! You are a FABULOUS writer. I read your original "Mercy" short in e-zine! - AWESOME! I read almost all of the shorts there and i have to say I enjoyed yours the most (not just sayin'). You have a gift. Be sure to keep it up! And, I enjoyed your 5 minutes tonight, as much as I enjoyed all the others. Don't feel the least bit "out of place"! There were other fictions. Your's was outstanding. I can't tell you that enough. I was an English major (years ago) and have read a TON and done some writing and editing myself, and you do have a gift, my dear! Keep it up!! I am a new and enthusiastic follower!

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  24. Oh I have never seen fiction FMF, exciting. Left me wanting more. Have a blessed weekend. Tara.

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  25. you definitely have my attention megan:) i'm not sure who my neighbor is tonite since i was linked at the #1 spot...and you are the last one. first time this has ever linked me this way. glad i found your post. loved it!

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  26. Wow...I was hooked! I'll so read that when you publish!

    Lisa @ http://lisashearingblog.blogspot.com/2013/09/mercy-five-minute-friday.html

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  27. How cool, what a neat twist on Five Minute Friday!!

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  28. Fiction never occurred to me. As a mystery lover, I was ready to read the rest. Keep writing

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  29. Wow - yes, I never thought about using fiction for fmf! This is very engaging!

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  30. Oh man, I want to keep reading!! What comes next?!?!?!

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  31. I love this! Don't get me wrong, I love reading all the fmf posts about encouragement and God's mercy and grace, but this is refreshing, too! Will there be more? I'd love to read the whole story!

    http://raisingamommy.blogspot.com/2013/09/fmf-mercy.html

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  32. wow! was trying to figure out if this was real life or fiction or fiction based on real life! fun to read something totally different in these 5 minute writes! what fun!

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  33. I like it!! Wasn't expecting the fiction, but you write so well. :) Going to be a great story.

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  34. Loved this fiction! I clicked over from Five Minute Friday, and it was an attention grabbing beginning that kept me with every word!

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  35. What a great idea, to use the prompt for fiction. Well done!

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  36. Visiting from FMF - totally took this in a cool direction, using it for the non-obvious. You are very talented!

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  37. Love it! Great change-up!! Great writing!

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  38. Totally unexpected! Good job. :)

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  39. Okay that was all kinds of awesome... sort of reminds me of Dexter... all dark and twisty!!! Write on lady, write on!

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  40. Definitely unexpected... I'm a fan of fiction, so kudos! :-)

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  41. FUN!! Okay so maybe I'm twisted but it wasn't what I was expecting and I love it! Good job...

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  42. what a fun surprise...loved the imagery in your writing, Megan :)

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  43. So awesome!!!

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  44. You definitely grabbed me by the collar and pulled me in with your first line. Totally not what I was expecting - very fun :-)

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  45. Over here from FMF.
    Loved the way you wrote this. It drew you in with the unexpected and kept your attention.

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  46. This is great. Totally awesome, and I certainly didn't expect the fiction.

    And that mug is fantastic. Love me some Doctor Who.

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  47. Tiffany Mrsh HaywoodSeptember 13, 2013 at 7:14 PM

    Wow! I want more! Totally unexpected but a great read and it drew me in instantly...

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  48. great writing! I'm after you again on the link up :)

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  49. pitterpatterchildrenSeptember 13, 2013 at 9:30 PM

    Wow. That is great. Makes me want to read your book when you come out with one!

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  50. Oo! I like dark. This is fun. I'm glad I stopped by from FMF.

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  51. This is the most creative Five Minute Friday I've ever read. It's awesome!

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  52. Wow, very unexpected, but great, entry!

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  53. I love it! Sometimes I like the slightly "twisted" too. :)

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  54. If you want to be a better writer (which we all do), you should really proofread before putting your prose on the World Wide Web. You misspelled the word "predictable," and are missing at least one comma. I don't think your comma misuse is an accident, given the fact that you often misuse commas in your writing.

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  55. That had a twist I didn't expect! Wow, powerful writing.

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